An unusual concept and strong characters shine through stilted writing and unbelievable plot devices.



Accomplished business writer Barnes (Consulting on the Inside, 2011, etc.) makes her first foray into mystery, with murder, mergers and mayhem.

Organization development consultant Sarah Hawthorne receives an unexpected, unsettling phone call from a client at 3 a.m. When that client disappears and is later found dead, Sarah finds herself drawn into the police investigation, with detectives hoping to use her inside knowledge of the company to help whittle down the suspect list. Struggling to reconcile that task with her professional ethics, Sarah initially embarks on some tentative interviewing, but a second murder causes her to wholeheartedly commit to the investigation, even traveling out of state to track down leads. Barnes writes with the same elegant clarity and formality that enrich her nonfiction, although it can sometimes make this mystery feel stuffy (e.g., “as she had neither the technical nor the executive background that might help her gain an understanding of the effectiveness of one strategic direction over another”). Though typically brief, didactic passages are somewhat frequent, and they detract from the story’s pacing. Dialogue often comes across as wooden and unnatural, and characters use contractions far less frequently than they would in real life. The resulting story is interesting enough, but it never fully finds its footing. Some plot twists strain credulity, such as the police asking a civilian and potential suspect for help, but, in contrast, character development is deft and sure, with particularly appealing diversity among the characters in terms of ages, nationalities, ethnicities and values. The novelty of a business consultant in a detective role also adds to the enjoyment. Barnes suggests that this is the first book in a corporate mystery series, so readers can anticipate improvement over time, especially since Barnes has the raw writing talent and complex characters needed to produce a page turner. Her first fiction effort merely stumbles over itself while trying to showcase that potential.

An unusual concept and strong characters shine through stilted writing and unbelievable plot devices.

Pub Date: March 7, 2012

ISBN: 978-0615549033

Page Count: 168

Publisher: Johari Press

Review Posted Online: Oct. 23, 2012

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A YA novel that treats its subject and its readers with respect while delivering an engaging story.



In the ninth book in the Bluford young-adult series, a young Latino man walks away from violence—but at great personal cost.

In a large Southern California city, 16-year-old Martin Luna hangs out on the fringes of gang life. He’s disaffected, fatherless and increasingly drawn into the orbit of the older, rougher Frankie. When a stray bullet kills Martin’s adored 8-year-old brother, Huero, Martin seems to be heading into a life of crime. But Martin’s mother, determined not to lose another son, moves him to another neighborhood—the fictional town of Bluford, where he attends the racially diverse Bluford High. At his new school, the still-grieving Martin quickly makes enemies and gets into trouble. But he also makes friends with a kind English teacher and catches the eye of Vicky, a smart, pretty and outgoing Bluford student. Martin’s first-person narration supplies much of the book’s power. His dialogue is plain, but realistic and believable, and the authors wisely avoid the temptation to lard his speech with dated and potentially embarrassing slang. The author draws a vivid and affecting picture of Martin’s pain and confusion, bringing a tight-lipped teenager to life. In fact, Martin’s character is so well drawn that when he realizes the truth about his friend Frankie, readers won’t feel as if they are watching an after-school special, but as though they are observing the natural progression of Martin’s personal growth. This short novel appears to be aimed at urban teens who don’t often see their neighborhoods portrayed in young-adult fiction, but its sophisticated characters and affecting story will likely have much wider appeal.

A YA novel that treats its subject and its readers with respect while delivering an engaging story.

Pub Date: Jan. 1, 2004

ISBN: 978-1591940173

Page Count: 152

Publisher: Townsend Press

Review Posted Online: Jan. 26, 2013

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A short, simple, and sweet tale about two friends and a horse.

Mary's Song

From the Dream Horse Adventure Series series , Vol. 1

A novel tells the story of two spirited girls who set out to save a lame foal in 1952.

Mary, age 12, lacks muscle control of her legs and must use a wheelchair. Her life is constantly interrupted by trips with her widower father to assorted doctors, all of whom have failed to help her. Mary tolerates the treatments, hoping to one day walk unassisted, but her true passion involves horses. Possessing a library filled with horse books, she loves watching and drawing the animals at a neighboring farm. She longs to own one herself. But her father, overprotective due to her disability and his own lingering grief over Mary’s dead mother, makes her keep her distance. Mary befriends Laura, the emotionally neglected daughter of the wealthy neighboring farm owners, and the two share secret buggy rides. Both girls are attracted to Illusion, a beautiful red bay filly on the farm. Mary learns that Illusion is to be put down by a veterinarian because of a lame leg. Horrified, she decides to talk to the barn manager about the horse (“Isn’t it okay for her to live even if she’s not perfect? I think she deserves a chance”). Soon, Mary and Laura attempt to raise money to save Illusion. At the same time, Mary begins to gain control of her legs thanks to water therapy and secret therapeutic riding with Laura. There is indeed a great deal of poignancy in a story of a girl with a disability fighting to defend the intrinsic value of a lame animal. But this book, the first installment of the Dream Horse Adventure Series, would be twice as touching if Mary interacted with Illusion more. In the tale’s opening, she watches the foal from afar, but she actually spends very little time with the filly she tries so hard to protect. This turns out to be a strange development given the degree to which the narrative relies on her devotion. Count (Selah’s Sweet Dream, 2015) draws Mary and Laura in broad but believable strokes, defined mainly by their unrelenting pluckiness in the face of adversity. While the work tackles disability, death, and grief, Mary’s and Laura’s environments are so idyllic and their optimism and perseverance so remarkable that the story retains an aura of uncomplicated gentleness throughout.

A short, simple, and sweet tale about two friends and a horse.

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Page Count: -

Publisher: Hastings Creations Group

Review Posted Online: Oct. 15, 2016

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